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    dots Submission Name: [too] Dazeddots

    Author: Agent V.
    ASL Info:    23/girl/small town
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 38/29/24
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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       Experimentation...thought provoking or useless whimsy?

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    dots[too] Dazeddots

    Sitting dazed in a room completely coherent and unrealistically balanced between the beginning of one thought and the end of another.

    Deviating from fate only to rebound back to the norm that is solitude and dependency. In the math of the universe this equation is undefined. Hardly senseless and completely out of focus.

    Oblivion seems a sound decision and thoughtful outcome, although no one thing can ever deny change. Keeping it simple and quiet; the best cure for all things that take a moment or two to breathe--or not.

    Submitted on 2008-11-21 17:17:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its thought-provoking to me because the meaning is so obscure,

    its one of those "for me you meant this" pieces

    well Im not sure what you meant

    but It seemed to allude to some nice ideas

    when I read it I was sitting room (actually I am),my thoughts are all over the place because Ive been sick for a while

    but anyway,the idea of getting carried away with your thoughts while in seclusion,of having a sharp and clear picture of things can lead to the biggest absurdities (mid stanza),you know,about anything...

    thats what I thought was cool if indeed thats what you meant,if not you might wanna ellaborate more/not ellaborate at all,

    but your prose is very nice


    PS: breath or not,a tough decision!
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

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