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    dots Submission Name: A THOUSAND MILES AWAYdots
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    Author: L.L.COLLINS
    ASL Info:    25-ORLANDO, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 172/147/36
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA THOUSAND MILES AWAYdots
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    A thousand miles away
    From the one I love,
    I lie collapse beneath
    The suns burning bluff.
    Denied of his touches
    I withdraw from the drug,
    Addicted to affections
    I can never get enough.
    I am just a miserable piece
    Of the unsightly of the scene
    Paint me green,
    I blend into the distance between
    My carry on bones
    are utterly gone,
    My strong is on post-pone
    My thoughts are at home.
    You complete me,
    Like the delicate leaves,
    Dripping life atop
    The forest trees.
    I limber into the winds
    Of vanishings,
    Hoping to blow
    toward destiny.
    Occasionally
    I sing the praises of used to be,
    But the moon and the stars
    Just aint enough for me.
    It seems too far from hope
    Is hope-less-,
    And too hard to cope
    Leaves me broken.
    Now Im the flesh and blood
    Of the soul-less,
    Flaunting your rare love
    Like a token.
    Should I leave the grey world
    For the sky blue,
    Should I risk everything
    To be with you.
    Should I fill my words
    With I miss you,
    Should I speak from lips
    That never kiss you.
    Or should I..
    Patiently wait
    For my pain to erase
    and my world to be safe
    from A thousand miles away.





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      Wow.. I loved it. Absolutely loved it. It was so simple.. but so.. endearing. So easy to relate to. So easy to understand. You didn't try to cover it up with something delicate and difficult. You just wrote what you thought and it came out like this?

    My two favorite lines.. god.. how could I have just two.. but the two that really stand out to me are these:

    "my strong is on post-pone"

    "occasionally,
    i sing the praises of used to be"

    These are lines I've never heard before. They way you describe your weakness... and your memories... you did it in a way that was all yours. No one can take that from you.

    it was amazing. love it. favoriting it.. ;)

    -samantha
    | Posted on 2008-11-22 00:00:00 | by sunsetserenity | [ Reply to This ]


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