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    dots Submission Name: tell medots
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    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    19/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/51/53
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotstell medots
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    Should i forever feel regret for what i've done?
    I've harmed no one, but myself.
    Do you see them?
    These scars are yours to bear.
    I shall live my life with this burden for the world to see and judge.

    For this is not blood,
    drying to cease the pain spilling out of these open wounds into the world.

    This is my flesh,
    torn open in an act of solemn hatred.
    Slowly sewing itself back together,
    As i sit to watch it heal.

    Can you sit there and watch me fall?
    falling deeper and deeper everyday into this dark abyss.
    dying a little more everyday.

    Try to look at me. see past everything you've learned to remember of my face,
    look past the sunken eyes, so empty but filled with sorrow.
    past these tearstained cheeks,
    look past the self inflicted pain thats been caused, and the burden i've become.

    try to look at me, the way i am, like this,
    can you tell me you still love me?





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