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    dots Submission Name: Metaphoric Suicidedots
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    Author: Seedofbayne
    ASL Info:    19/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 55/82/27
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 198
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    Bytes: 501



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    dotsMetaphoric Suicidedots
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    Its been many days since i've picked up my pen
    Words just calling, reaching for zen

    as my foe keeps fighting with strife
    i lay down my sword, and end my own life

    world of blackness calling my name
    i keep looking back, but it's never the same

    mixing emotions i hide my face
    in place of my heart there's a black hole in space

    questions unanswered, never again
    well this is it, its fin, the end




    Submitted on 2008-11-22 01:40:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I liked it alot. The eighth line through the flow off a bit, but it was still very good.
    Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-11-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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