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    dots Submission Name: A world for Youdots
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    Author: SAGITTREVEALED
    ASL Info:    22/m/ P.C. FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 26/26/16
    Words: 512
    Class/Type: Prose/Romance
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    dotsA world for Youdots
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    What would it take to put your misery to rest, how can I consol you when your pain flows?
    Your tears fall on my heart like brimstone, Igniting a volitile rage, that can only be quenched in the blood of your quarry.
    As my arms wrap 'round to hold you tight, my mind turns only to vengence! I know you would find no comfort in their destruction, though I would find solice in knowing they can harm you no longer. The world is an invading force and I am your fortress. My walls built by Karma, the mortar mixed with the blood of Aphrodite herself. The battlements posted by an army of Centars, commanded by Sagittarius, reborn for this soul purpose. The foot soldiers, ordered to fate by Hecate, and mine archers loose strait and true their arrows as AEolis calms his winds to offer no resistance.
    Against you, the opposition stands no chance, dead in their tracks. All you must do is confide in me and my bridge shall lower to offer you a warm fire, plush bed, and a feast to excede any expectation. These are my Heart, Soul, and Mind. Take them and make them your own. You are The Goddess which shapes this, mine world. Your Word Is Law!
    Be not afraid to break any treaty, be not afraid to broker any peace. I will be the table at which you sit, or the power to crush all foes back into the dust from wence they came.
    Your smile shines like the sun upon my withered crops, bringing them out of frost, as your love flows forth to water them. Your laughter is sweet like the song of the Nightengale. It sits in Honeysuckle out side my window, so I might have an Earthly reminder of your sound and scent.
    You are the Earth from which all my life springs, just as you are the Sky that all look upon and wish to join.
    Even in your darkness you shine brighter than The Full Moon, that my path be always clear to the ends which you set me forth.
    Let the stars be the strings of a Harp, so you might fancy to compose a song of passion.
    Let all the Planets be your notes, that others may look up and learn your ballad.
    Let all the Space Between be the time in which you find Peace, that you may never again be exhausted and restless.
    Let us be as The Needle and Thread, that when in unison, can become anything we wish to invision. Incomplete without one another, but tailoring and mending our life to perfection together. This is your Legacy in me.
    This is the World that I have set at your feet.
    Now all you must do is WILL IT AND IT SHALL BE YOURS!
    FOR HER, I WRITE~~~
    FOR HER, MY LIFE~~~
    FOR HER, THE WORLD~~~
    FOR HER SAND, MORE PRECIOUS THAN MY PEARL!!!

    LOVE ALWAYS YOUR SAGITTARIUS REVEALED




    Submitted on 2008-11-22 07:23:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, Love.
    But of course it's beautiful. Words that reassure, (with actions to match), and phrases that reach deep into me and bring forth that smile you seem to love so much. I love you.

    <3 Yours.
    | Posted on 2008-11-22 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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