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    dots Submission Name: Separation into Component Parts ( Disintegration dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSeparation into Component Parts ( Disintegration dots

    Separation into Component Parts ( Disintegration )

    Vortex of silence

    Watching sun slide from crystalline edges
    The quiet people do not question
    The blended diaphanous to horizon smacking
    is anotherís world of disintegration

    White weddings oscillation
    Designing winking signs
    To map the leads to another time

    Searching for some kind of drug induced
    Its springboard of truth
    Blathered indefinable
    Trafficked in parcels of men at work

    I joined loud punk instigations
    I ate the hungry hours
    Wearing shocks and coloured language
    It was all hard driven rebellion
    And tattooed distinction

    Now the revolution is laid back
    Looking from its vortex of silence
    Thinks on the exclamation
    Designed by other winking signs
    Leading maps to other forms of disintegrating

    The grip is different now
    Disregarded seconds
    Pay their own attentions
    And that old losing time
    Is not lost on me
    Instead it flows
    Solidifies with, to, on, another
    And rages against its own moments of recognition

    Dog war of rusting Angles
    Scurrying feet pressed between the engines format
    Wheeled across concrete veins
    By the Laminated traders of hours and consumables

    Means nothing to me

    Vortex of silence

    In a privacy of shadows
    Watches sun slide from crystalline edges
    A perfect moment of disintegration

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