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    dots Submission Name: The Daydots

    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
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    dotsThe Daydots

    The Day

    The day the people sealed their fate,
    It was then they chose a man so great,
    But inexperienced and mysterious was that man,
    That it was then that freedom faded from the land,

    He was elected by popularity alone,
    But the people failed to realize the damage theyíve done,
    They have bound their hands to the service of masters,
    We once stood for freedom, but now we are nothing better than a few jeers and laughters,

    We have died this day as a nation,
    And only God can revive us again,
    May In God We Trust stand true,
    Or it will be the clothes off our backs, after our rations,

    For our enemies rejoiced in the sight of this new leader,
    A leader who gained such by his race alone,
    Has now allied himself with those whom seek our annihilation,
    And the destruction and conquering of our homes,

    O, woe is the day the eagle surrenders to the hunter,
    That America befriends those who hunt her,
    That she allies with the most abominable enemies,
    And seeks no longer to preserve manís natural liberties,

    So woe is the day of the fifth of November,
    I pray that the morals and virtues of Old America are remembered,
    America surrendered in the year of 2008,
    I pray that God saves us before itís too late.

    Submitted on 2008-11-23 01:12:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wheres the HOPE man? jk.
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by Cathartus | [ Reply to This ]
      wow!!!!!!!!! its a breath of fresh air the languge its so not angst or venting it well put togther and wow i love it and the idea behind it
    "I pray that God saves us before itís too late." its origanal and wow just plz promis me you will alway take pride in your poetry ... have you ever heard of edger allen poe well if you havent i recamend him but your origanality and languge use is simmalar

    sincerly nena
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]

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