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    dots Submission Name: Skinneddots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSkinneddots
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    Sinking

    Sinking under the waves

    Wake smothers

    Bubbles rise to the air

    It's dark,

    But not so dark

    That she can't see it's gone

    Feel the loss

    Wish that justice was fair




    Subtle entities drift by

    Aimlessly far above,

    But oh, much too far

    In this stranger they sway

    Refuse and forget

    What they've destroyed in their own fickle clay




    What they've drowned in a word

    Idolized on a whim

    Thrown, they'll never know what, to the wind

    Ocean's rage in betrayal

    Years at work; that should say all

    For what?

    Dreaming big,

    And this dream

    Promptly skinned




    Submitted on 2008-11-23 01:22:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem makes me think about how stuff works. It's kind of funny how things aren't right and everyone knows it, but no one does anything about it. It's funny. hahahahahaha
    | Posted on 2008-11-25 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]


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