Fan the Flames by Roula

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Submission Name: Fan the Flames dots

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Author:	Roula
ASL Info:	18/female
Elite Ratio:	2.72 - 46/64/45
Words:	39

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	581
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	271

Description:
Just a quick little write.

Fan the Flames dots

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My heart was burned,
my chest filled with smoke,
my body became coal.

Each breath I took
fanned the flame.

Reduced to embers-
but the rhythm to your lyrics
remained strong.

The beat goes on.

Submitted on 2008-11-23 06:09:28 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Its about this guy I broke up with about a year ago. He was a musician and I had my itunes on shuffle and a song he wrote came on and all the pain just came rushing back.
| Posted on 2008-11-24 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, but there is more than one interpretation that can be taken away. On first reading, I took it as physical love passion. But it could have other meanings such as rapture for a song's lyrics. I don't think it is necessary for a poem to have only one meaning to all. The length of a poem doesn't matter. What matters is if it gets to the reader/listener. This does.
| Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  Em, I'm not altogether sure what this is about to be totally honest so I'm not gonna rate it.

It is extremely short but that's not necessarily bad I just don't get the message.

All I can say is it should be "the rhythm OF your lyrics"
| Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by ChildInTime | [ Reply to This ]
  Kinda short but I like it but what is it you are trying to accomplish?
| Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]

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