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    dots Submission Name: Fan the Flamesdots

    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 583
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 271

       Just a quick little write.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFan the Flamesdots

    My heart was burned,
    my chest filled with smoke,
    my body became coal.

    Each breath I took
    fanned the flame.

    Reduced to embers-
    but the rhythm to your lyrics
    remained strong.

    The beat goes on.

    Submitted on 2008-11-23 06:09:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Its about this guy I broke up with about a year ago. He was a musician and I had my itunes on shuffle and a song he wrote came on and all the pain just came rushing back.
    | Posted on 2008-11-24 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, but there is more than one interpretation that can be taken away. On first reading, I took it as physical love passion. But it could have other meanings such as rapture for a song's lyrics. I don't think it is necessary for a poem to have only one meaning to all. The length of a poem doesn't matter. What matters is if it gets to the reader/listener. This does.
    | Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Em, I'm not altogether sure what this is about to be totally honest so I'm not gonna rate it.

    It is extremely short but that's not necessarily bad I just don't get the message.

    All I can say is it should be "the rhythm OF your lyrics"
    | Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by ChildInTime | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda short but I like it but what is it you are trying to accomplish?
    | Posted on 2008-11-23 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]

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