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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: Seedofbayne
    ASL Info:    19/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 55/82/27
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 117
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 684



    Description:
       its a song about religion and some lies


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    dotsWaitingdots
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    As the world turns i wait
    for someone new to take your place
    reality is filled with hate
    Staring you right in the face

    I need something better

    all along it was a lie
    quit your aching, tell me why
    suffer madness through and through
    all of this because of you

    i need something better

    walk with faith in hand
    Leave it in the sand
    face your dying day
    waiting to lead astray

    i need something better

    sense the veil its laying thin
    now YOU are the evil twin..........

    ..........watch me death has come again.




    Submitted on 2008-11-23 12:53:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was written very well. Short so it wasn't very descriptive. it leaves questions as to why you need something better, what was a lie, why are you feelings this way.
    Other than leaving the reader questioning (which is always good, make them use their imaginations!) It was fantastic.
    Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-11-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]



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