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    dots Submission Name: My Spider Webdots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 665
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    Bytes: 1702



    Description:
       Stuck in life and looking for a way out.


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    dotsMy Spider Webdots
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    If life was what i thought
    If dreams became reality
    If thoughts weren't just thinking
    If I had made a choice
    I'd dream that it was different

    I turn around and see black
    I dream at night, that I cannot fight back
    When I wake the world is black

    When I suffer I begin to feel no pain
    As the moon rises I sit and stare feeling insane

    Dreaming to see something I only know is there

    But cannot see, Only feel
    I want so many things that don't seem real

    But feel like I'm stuck on glue
    Trapped in a spiders web, black and blue

    Waiting to have blood sucked out of me
    My life a waiting memory

    Only I to feel the pain I cannot feel

    Tomorrow will bring the same dreary day
    The night cold as ice as it fades away

    In this sticky web I look, and wait for a way out
    But not one thought can come about

    I can no longer move
    Access denied never to be approved

    My arms, legs, and mind tired
    I feel stuck and now see nothing
    No light, no last way out of this web

    What do I do, where do I make a realization
    How do I know whats even true

    Life is supposed to be lived
    But I cannot reach any further than my shoe

    Others see it, but I cannot

    Others breathe it, and I breathe ice
    Cold fractions of a webb and blackness, with no advice

    Why can't I see, What have I done
    So, what now?
    Knowing it's all just begun




    Submitted on 2008-11-24 16:48:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      damn girl. i almost cried. its really hard to see what your doing to yourself or what others are doing to you even when you do look outside the box. its especially hard to realize that everyone around is right when you so badly want something to work. you know what you want and sometimes lose grip on the reality of a situation when it doesnt go your way. so does everyone else tho. especially me. i love you long time and hope you know that everything will be okay and feeling the pain just means your human but you will recover....love you long time. awesome poem tho. super fetch!
    | Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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