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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Lead Weight

    To look from the peak of dreams
    And open those inspirational wings
    Take flight on eternal winds
    Heart in its space soaring
    Trusting to loves imaginings

    A leaping embrace into the presence of light
    Eyes and smiles generous with accepting
    Extricated from doubts precipice edge
    An Angel called to the souls migration
    Toe poised and knee raised
    Arms flung wide
    And head held height
    Set to gaze upon the open skies
    Floats a child’s balloon
    A picture of hopes wanton disentanglement

    But there also a thread of life follows
    Holds a trap
    The lines scant trailing behind
    Feels the tug
    And from that indelible chord
    The lead weight attached
    Pulls wearily back
    To the ground
    Bird of freedom falls forlorn
    Every seventh heaven burdened
    By twisted knots
    Carrying their loops and snagged entrails
    From the lead weight
    In your heart

    Hidden Psychoanalytical shade
    Yanks at the corners of your smile
    Without closure this grey dull
    And pitted scar
    Drags dour its trail of dust
    Marked by drops of tears
    Damage its only afterthought
    Of quiet screamed hurt
    Unhappiness for all the happy mirror masked
    Bequeaths the years of sadness it sought

    In your palm written the fated destiny
    Never to be whole
    Never to be free
    Bleeding its cut splinter of betrayal
    Long before adulthood embraced
    The child’s need for escape

    Running heedless toward any inspired edge
    And launch far enough
    And far enough
    And long enough
    Into the blue
    And glide on joyous fictions
    Released upward to heights
    Yet unattained
    And simply float drift away

    Start again

    But the line fixes and fixated
    Held fast to the leaden weight weighted
    Pulls heavier
    Than the ground beneath your feet







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      This is fantastic. As, I read it aloud, it felt like it was just falling out of my mouth.
    | Posted on 2008-11-26 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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