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    dots Submission Name: Sad truth about dreamsdots
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    Author: nastydevil
    ASL Info:    17/male/sault ste maire
    Elite Ratio:    0.94 - 1/5/13
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 107
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 763



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    dotsSad truth about dreamsdots
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    Only if dreams were reality
    I would be different
    There would actually be a glow
    coming off of my body

    Dream being real would bring her to me
    us being together, cuddling watching t.v.
    only thing I've ever wanted
    yet, it will never happen

    But, dreams play tricks
    on your mind and body
    the dream you're happy, it's not true
    just last week you were suicidal
    Dreams make you feel good, and destroy you

    When you're back in reality, nothing's fine
    there's so many problems around you
    just down the street a little girl gets raped
    people need to stop dreaming dreams
    and make them reality.




    Submitted on 2008-11-24 18:29:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Definatly deep I think you have done deinatly better from the last one I commented on. But if you take out the in from stanza 3 line 3 it would improve the rythm. also Ima gonna stalk youir works because I tend to right some deep stuff. you should read some of it and comment it as well. I think you have the potential to be a great deep emotion poet. I also believe that this life is testing you and you just need to pass its tests and life will grant you a reward that you can cherish for all time to come. I love your writings, they really hit home in my heart so Keep up the great work Mr.
    | Posted on 2008-11-26 00:00:00 | by Sepheroth432 | [ Reply to This ]



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