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    dots Submission Name: Emotions Slasheddots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 834
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 616
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       I wrote this a little while ago when I was going through a really bad break up ...lets just say I wasn't to happy.


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    Easier to give up

    Then to fill worth in your cup

    Many things much easier to do

    Much easier than a follow through

    You pretended to see me

    To understand what person I wanted to be

    You mocked my worth

    Took my life as a joke with no girth

    Not trying to even understand

    No feelings to comprehend

    What was I to you ?

    What things did you act ?

    What was real ?

    What was fake?

    Were you ever telling the truth?

    Was everything trully a lie?

    Could I really be that nieve?

    You think that I am scared

    Thinking I am just another girl

    I guess you know the difference now

    I just wanted to be loved by you

    Guess I picked the wrong person to ask

    Someone that is so dark and evil

    I expected so much

    Didn't I ?

    I know you were wrong

    But that doesn't change anything

    I know what happened

    But that doesn't change anything either

    I understand to the fullest extent what happened

    But yet I feel no feeling of acceptance

    I feel alone

    I feel subjected to a loss

    A loss that I did not expect

    But still that isn't fair

    I did my part

    I loved you till the end

    I loved you for who you were'

    You screwed me over

    Threw me under the bridge

    I gave you diamonds

    And you crushed them into dirt

    What the fuck happened?

    I can't wrap my finger around what happened

    I am lost in a world with no forgiveness

    Still I try to find a way to forgive you

    A way that I can forgive you in my heart but not get hurt

    Not get involved

    Not do to much

    I don't want you to think theres a chance

    But at the same time I need my closure too

    I don't know how to deal with this

    I loved you so much

    I don't feel the need to see you

    I feel vomity when I think of you

    It makes me sick to my stomach to think of you

    I just don't know what happened to the person I loved

    I didn't feel right leaving

    But I'd feel worse if I'd have stayed

    I'd hate to have stayed

    You said the worst thing was that we never got married and you regret it

    What the fuck!

    Thats all I have to say about that

    What then?

    I'd really have been screwed

    Are you insane?

    I think he is

    I still can't believe this

    Maybe I went right passed it

    Maybe I skewed the truth

    It's very possible

    I wish I didn't have to destroy you to get what I needed

    But I had no choice

    Really you brought this upon yourself

    You fucked me over first

    You didn't treat me how I treated you

    Who knows at this point if anything you have said is true

    This is my life you ruined

    Do you even care?

    You say you owe me a real apology

    What the fuck is that?

    First of all duh

    Second of all ...you just figured that out

    Someone must of wrote stupid on your head

    I just don't understand

    Was I always this stupid as well?

    Were you always feeding me bullshit?

    Or did I ask for this ?

    Did I want this in order to prove something?

    Something to myself not to you

    Whatever it is I definitely didn't want this

    When it hurts what will happen

    In the end will it be a happy ending

    At least for someone

    I hurt so much

    I wonder why I am not dead

    The pain seeps through my body

    Like the plague surrounded this world

    Indescretely taking over my body

    Suffocating my lungs

    I ache of unhappiness

    And reek of insanity

    What do I do now?

    How do I stay sane?

    How do I feel normal once again?

    How do I start living life?

    How do I do anything ?

    I'm tired of sinking

    I want to float

    I want to at least ride a wave

    Ride a ship

    Be on top of the ocean rather than treading in the sea about to go under

    I can't handle it anymore it's getting to me






    Submitted on 2008-11-24 21:51:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This really made me think, many poems are too blatant, but I think this really emphasizes your emotions in a lot of subtle ways. Great analogies as well!

    "...I think he is

    I still can't believe this

    Maybe I went right passed it

    Maybe I skewed the truth..."

    These lines and those like them are great because they follow a normal thought process. No one is ever 100% sure of their feelings all of the time and your poem reflects that bravo!
    | Posted on 2008-11-25 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]


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