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    dots Submission Name: That Dark nightdots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 427
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 500
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsThat Dark nightdots
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    You come into the cold dark room

    One dim light captures the outlining of my face

    Damp, cold tears running down my cheek

    The words I want to speak will not leave my stunned face

    My dark blue eyes softly stare at your dark beat face

    You look so angry

    Lost with words I don't know what to say

    Not knowing whether to yell or to walk with grave dissapointment

    Your black jacket stinks of ciggarettes

    Your bold voice sends chills down my spine

    I want to tell you how wrong you are for what you did

    I'm so weak from not eating, I want to vomit

    The stress you caused me goes without explaining

    I sink back into the squeeky couch and stare into your eyes

    Dark, loney, and angry , you stare

    I slowly inch towards the door, ready to burst out of there

    Grabbing me first, throwing me violently to the floor

    My arms are bleeding, my voice shaking

    Your voice screeches like a stopping car

    My voice silent as night

    I run but my strength doesn't outlast you

    I fight but am now broken

    I live but feel empty inside with this hallow body

    Not knowing what will happen next I wait

    Slowly getting up, your voice echos and booms into the dark room

    My thoughts unsure of what it is you'll do

    Then it happens...

    I wake up to reality

    Reality being the untrustworthy officer

    The battery I recieved with no punishment for him

    The stinking news of nothing

    Treated like and animal my mouth dropped

    Tears and emotions thrashing down like hurricane katrina

    I don't know what to do

    No help, no sympathy

    There I lay in societys eye

    A woman whom has been abused so many times before

    A woman who will do nothing

    A powerless woman who deserves no help

    Nothing was done, I was a victim

    Treated like the criminal

    I pressed charges

    They laughed in my face as if I was used to this

    What could I say, shocked I was

    This is the first time I called

    The first time this has happened

    I know the chilling feeling of no escape

    No matter how right you may be

    It still depends on who see's





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