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    dots Submission Name: The Lover and the Liardots
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    Author: dear
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Lover and the Liardots
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    I fit my hand into yours, your fingers interlocking with mine.
    You told me that my hand fit rightfully in yours.
    We followed some heavily traversed path, made by others before.
    The future you unrolled before me, a fate that I abhored.
    But I let my body toll along, my mind in other places.
    You never knew the girl of whom you risked fate with.
    Warnings were signaled to you from me but you just wouldn't have it.
    Then, without a warning, for you did not notice, I fell to my knees.
    I would not budge, I would not move, not an answer nor a tear.
    You cursed my name and kicked my frame but left me without bruises.
    Ultimately, I pushed you away, splitting our paths from per chances.
    With a sigh of relief and an old grin of defeat, I could once again breathe.
    Well, you told me that my hand fit rightfully in yours.
    But if that were so, then why was my hand never comfortable placed within yours?

    I said love while speaking lies for you weren't open for reason.
    You cried lies with your tongue well trained for false tales of love.
    And I could never really set apart the lover from the liar.
    But from this end, all I can say is thank God the game is over.




    Submitted on 2008-11-26 09:58:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      With a sigh of relief and an old grin of defeat, I could once again breathe.

    I can affiliate with this, sometimes a relationship can become constricting, because of lies, maybe, or jealousy. One comes at a point of realization that your freedom is restricted, the own self becomes oppressed. I've had that.
    I still enjoy my newly conquered freedom every day.

    You cursed my name and kicked my frame but left me without bruises.

    The mental abuse, words spoken in ill contempt, meant only to manipulate. When has the balance become so tilted? Another point of realisation and the strength to withstand it to obtain "freedom".

    Whatever reasons, a relationship is built on trust. A lie can shatter so many feeling, that afterwards proves harder and harder to mend, the shards smaller and smaller.

    I really liked this piece, though maybe (and I'm a minimalist so this might just be me) you could tell the same thing with less words.
    Sharpen the poem, as it were.

    ~Urisen
    | Posted on 2009-12-26 00:00:00 | by Urisen | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed, love can often be blind, and lies can easily be ignored, forgotten, until they come back to haunt us. An insightful write you have penned here.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-11-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]



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