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    dots Submission Name: Writedots

    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 369
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    write man, write
    letter by word by line by paragraph by poem by lifetime
    don't stop for anything be it life, love, liberty, or lust
    write man, write
    your feelings, your thoughts, your heart and soul
    till blood shoots from underneath your fingernails and drips from your pencil and stains the sheet of paper you pour more and more onto
    write man, write
    take the Earth in your hand and make it right man, write
    when the pressure the world is placed on and taken from you and as they come and go
    write man, write
    since words of mouth give no justice to your emotions
    write man, write them on a bathroom wall
    take your fingernails and scar the tar on the street with and's, if's, and but's.
    write man, write
    bold black syllables on a majestic indigo horizon and sink your pencil point into every sixteen year old's note pad of broken promises and mispelled tear drop smeared heart-felt scribble-scratch
    valleys of graphite twisting in volumous circles from cover to cover
    write, for the love of God man, write like the lines keep you high on the very top level of cloud nine sitting on the stair case to heaven, transcribing life in poetry
    you must learn to see the urgency
    write before your candle light burns too low and the night of cold settles your fever
    write, man, write
    write as the day turns to late afternoon and blends with dark like the paper merges with your art
    write, man, write
    from every walk of life, I beg of you to talk the same language of this craft born of depressed inspiration and high expectations of a world far ahead of ours
    write, man, write with the swiftness of Godhands
    divine in fashion and its almighty purpose
    speak truths of yours unknown to the readers of our residential realm of remorse and revelry
    so that when the day comes when every word in your brain has somehow, sometime, somewhere been written and there is no paper left for you to tell your story
    you can take these words, these lines, these paragraphs, these poems, this lifetime into your tear-soaked hand and
    die, man, die, man,

    Submitted on 2004-07-10 00:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww man i liked this piece its a like a fight song for poets. the flow just went on and on about the situations and reasons people write. you hardly ever see something like that described and you did it, good job with this. people couldnt ask for nothing better
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      aw [censored] man! this is what i am talking about! representing th big N.O! I'm from New Orleans too. It good to hear people spit wise words, especially from my home town. But on tha real i like your flow. And I agree with Misty...hip CAN and WILL exist with the help of people like you! I love all the lines in this piece, especially:

    "write man, write them on a bathroom wall
    take your fingernails and scar the tar on the street with and's, if's, and but's.
    write man, write".

    I guess because I am one who writes on any surface like cardboard, napkins, notebook paper, receipts...and walls to keep my creative thought flowing. Keep spreading that poetic word! peace and God bless!
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]
      that right there justifies everything you've told me. you are living proof that hip hop/rap can be, is and will be poetry in some way or the other, only a true poet could have written this. i envy you for writting the words i thought i held as my own for getting it out to write man, write. i think you're a genius.

    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, all opinions and diffrences aside. you got some lyrical talent and this is something great. juist the way you declare to write, its like a substitution for doing stupid [censored] youll regret and thats what imma do write no matter who dont like what i write take the bad critizism with a smile

    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      ...raw, that [censored] goes hard... youre flow was kinda off and on, but you got content, thats where its at... take it, run with it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by bLiNdFAiTh | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey kiddo. I read it cause you asked me to. I really like the line that you added. It's true, too. When I write, I feel on top of the world. Ttys. Love Hannah

    p.s. i miss u.
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I really really enjoyed this piece. One of the most enjoyable that I have encountered on this site. I like your style. Write man, write. Unique piece in so many ways. The flow of it was perfect for the message. You have done a great thing here.

    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      *puts boxing gloves on*

    I'll spar witchu! Come on, let's go get em!


    Love your style. Where you been hiding at? You seem to have a lot of lyrical talent.

    Show it and be proud. Never let a hater step in the way.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is totally different than anything I have ever read, but I loved it! It was awesome. I really liked the repitition of "write, man, write". I loved the message and the way you expressed it. Totally awesome!
    | Posted on 2005-01-30 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      It's fresh and has loads of energy. I think it could be revised and polished a little, but this is a good piece. Welcome to the site. I'll look out for more of your stuff. Becky
    | Posted on 2004-07-10 00:00:00 | by SugarMouse | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this, its a lot different then the kinda stuff i usually read. i really liked the reptition and idk it was all pretty good. really good actually. its goin in my favs
    | Posted on 2004-07-10 00:00:00 | by Rosalynn Annett | [ Reply to This ]
      Great piece! I wish I coudl pick a line and say I absolutely loved it...but hoenslty AI enjoyed reading the whole thing! I particularaly liked:

    "take the Earth in your hand and make it right man, right"

    The word choice and as Morelladellamorte said the paly onw iords there was great. This is defintely a favorite.
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]

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