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What you do!


Author: Blackphoenix14
ASL Info:    17/male/AR
Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26 /87 /67
Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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What you do!



…..I wake up daily dreaming of you

…..I have so much patience and sensitivity
I never thought was possible

…..I’m not afraid of being with you. Rather,
not being with you

…..I want to be the best I can, if only to give
you the best I can

…..I not only think of forever, but I’m looking
forward to it

…..I feel like all that led me to this point,
painful or nice is for this good reason

…..Life seems too short to be shared with you

…..The nights are longer without you, and time
too fast when I’m with you

…..I break my sleep just to let you know I
thought of you

…..I want to be a better man because you
deserve the best

…..I would trade my voice to continually
hear you happy

I could continue forever and it’s all because of you




Submitted on 2008-11-27 02:55:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeeeaaahh... This is awesome i love it. It has a nice flow and was user friendly; The subject of love happens to be my favorite subjects to write about so i particularly enjoyed this piece: Thank you.


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| Posted on 2008-11-29 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
  nice peom i can understand were u are coming from i have felt that way myself befor
| Posted on 2008-11-27 00:00:00 | by dryken | [ Reply to This ]


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