Description: This one is written using the Pantoum form. The repeated lines are a requirement of this form. It's been quite a while since I've posted anything here but thought this particular poem might be of interest.
Falling in Love All Over Again -------------------------------------------
As tears of joy flow down my face
Please see the hope that lies within
When life seems such a trying race
I long to feel in love again
Please see the hope that lies within
I may not be what you desire
I long to feel in love again
I may not say what you require
I may not be what you desire
I can but be myself with you
I may not say what you require
It’s to ourselves we must be true
I can but be myself with you
I sense your needs and feel your pain
It’s to ourselves we must be true
All else leaves hope for love in vain
I sense your needs and feel your pain
I kiss your lips and hold you tight
All else leaves hope for love in vain
My heart says that this choice is right
I kiss your lips and hold you tight
When life seems such a trying race
My heart says that this choice is right
As tears of joy flow down my face
This pantoum was very well executed. So often when adhering to form, that form winds up driving the poem, but that is not the case here. The repeated lines echo your theme, weaving subtly yet surely through your thoughts The small doubts expressed are quashed by the repetition of the positive thoughts, and the rhythm and rhyme both advance the optimistic certainty that” My heart says that this choice is right”.
Adhering to such strict forms while sustaining interest takes imagination and skill, and you have succeeded in capturing and maintaining interest from beginning to end.
Well Done
Silver
Delightful! This for would undoubtedly add an immense extra challenge to writing a poem and keeping to a lucid story and rhyme scheme! You have done well, and this is just excellent!
Submission Name: Falling in Love All Over Again
