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    dots Submission Name: Jaileddots
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    Author: erinmaia
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 746



    Description:
       waiting for nothing to come.


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    dotsJaileddots
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    in this empty prison cell I lay
    these staring eyes, all cold and gray
    the strong, steel bars that lock this heart
    make haste the rust, tears me apart...

    locked up with all my dark despair
    this squeezed-up chest in need of air
    I once have loved and lost before
    then, old wounds had bled, gone sore...

    now, I wait for heaven's grace
    a man to wipe this tear-stained face
    a gripping hand that'll free this soul
    to rid the chains and make me whole...

    but years have passed, all leaves have withered
    tarnished are all things that once glittered
    still, no sign of light in sight
    no man to kiss and hold me tight...




    Submitted on 2008-11-28 16:51:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you so much for sharing this lovely piece of work.

    I enjoyed this poem very much for its flow and ryming structure; This piece is a very nice and tight descriptive delivery of emotion.

    Great work; Thanks for sharing.


    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
    | Posted on 2008-11-29 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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