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    dots Submission Name: To Say I've Been Theredots

    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsTo Say I've Been Theredots

    When I was fifteen I always dreamed that I'd buy a car
    Staring out the window wondering where Id go and how far

    I thought
    Well Id drive to the tallest mountain
    Climb the highest peak
    I would scale all the walls just to find
    What others seek
    Just so I can say
    To say that Ive been there
    Just to say
    Ive been there

    Then I was twenty eight with a car low on gasoline
    All my friends told me that it was insane just to go traveling
    They ask me, Whats the pointing in leaving, everythings all right here?
    Why would you go and try to find what isnt even out there?

    I said
    Well I drive to the farthest reign
    To see the largest ocean
    I would sail across the sea
    Taking pictures of dolphins posin
    Just so I can say
    To say that Ive been there
    Just to say
    Ive been there

    Now Im down the road and Ive got myself a girl
    She loves the great out doors
    And we always go traveling knowing
    Around the corner theres always more
    And when we get tired well kick back
    Just to watch the stars
    Sometimes I catch myself thinking
    Man I glad I got a car

    Well wed drive to the greatest forest
    To smell natures beauty
    And we would camp around under
    All the tall oak trees
    Just so we can say
    To say that weve been there
    Just to say
    Weve been there

    Submitted on 2008-11-28 17:10:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can def agree with the desire to just get into a car, and drive off, getting away from the mindlessness of society, and to the pureness of nature.

    The repetition worked well here, and the conflicting view of your friends versus yours also helped.
    | Posted on 2008-11-30 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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