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    dots Submission Name: Mood Landslidedots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 670
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 953



    Description:
       This is my way of describing what had been going on in my head.. I mean some people say life is like a rollercoaster with it's ups and downs but I picture mine more like a land slide. enjoy/


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    dotsMood Landslidedots
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    First there is a storm. With the storm comes rain. The ground begins to move beneath your feet. You can feel youself sliding with no way of stopping. The earth moves beneath and covers you. It's always such a mess when things like this happen. You find your self in hole. Looking up at the sky. It seems so far away you'll never reach it at this rate or so you think. You look to your left and see a sholve. and so you start to dig. Digging yourself a grave as deep as the worlds core. Each time you look up the sky seems further away making an attempted climib seem even more fuitle. You continue your dig. The hole starts to feel hot. You see lava seeping in at your feet. You look up one last time and see a helicopter and rescue crew coming down to save you. They grab you up, right as your shoes start to singe.



    Thank you all for helping me. Even if you didn't know it. You are my rescue crew.




    Submitted on 2008-11-29 04:03:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very detailed , alot of action , mystic , you pull the reader deep into the darkside , emotional rollercoaster ride , i ehjoy this poem very much , you have a eye for writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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