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    dots Submission Name: Venus ( 1.618 : 1 )dots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsVenus ( 1.618 : 1 )dots
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    Venus ( 1.618 : 1 )

    Who would see such bare force light
    To be or break the bonds of anonymous
    A panorama clouds sunset-ed bright
    Captured in the form
    Made sensual by her scarlet dress

    Far to beautiful not to cause
    Some moment of silence
    Some heartbeat ache
    And drowning in curves pauses momentarily
    To ponder on the thoughts of her dreams
    She is “who” secretly
    Inside the souls personality

    Pray quietly Oh Goddess Venus

    Feminine centre Venus
    Pour upon her lips
    A syllable of desire
    Wanting increasing
    To place the passion word
    Upon these lips of mine

    And need
    Sweet Goddess Venus
    Need to be
    A wanting unity joined
    By Venus





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      What a shining piece I liked the (1.618:1) in the title like a secret code

    Beautifully done.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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