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    dots Submission Name: Ballerina of Tearsdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 448
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Ballerina of Tears

    Rippled lappings to her toes
    Every years perturbation returns
    To stand in deep verdant edges
    Grass bank cups the legend
    Of a lonely pool

    Dark wisp ashen hair falls
    To head bowed
    She stands the Lilly naked
    Shawl of her own travail

    Tears incur
    Soft pressed closed eyes
    Remember
    Each drop caught
    Waves scend slowly one by one
    Away from her

    And in gentle water cascading
    Her reflection silken
    Dances
    In fluidities dominion
    Demi detourne, En croix, Entrechat, Soutenu en tournant

    Hold her finale
    Expressions of another year
    In heart broken sorrow
    Fails by its gravity ridden
    To release her










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