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    dots Submission Name: winterdots
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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotswinterdots
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    summer long ago did fade
    slipping off into the night.
    all the warmth that it had offered
    danced away in failing light.

    it has left a bitter chill
    covering the world in ice.
    hiding here within our homes
    submitted to this winters vice.

    the birds and song
    the childrens laughter.
    are gone upon this
    morning after.

    all the trees are frozen solid
    no life on thier limbs to see.
    the sights of summer I have wasted
    are so far out of sight to me.

    to the core this cold has gotten
    and uninvited will not leave.
    holding there it seems forever
    deep within the heart of me.

    don't misuse or take advantage
    of the things that warm your heart.
    In the end when these things vanish
    It will tear your world apart.

    children laughing, birds in song,
    the warmth you feel on summer days.
    hold them, heed them, never tire,
    from the warmth; or it will fade.







    Submitted on 2008-11-30 19:44:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I loved it and can relate deeply. The rhyme was consistant, the flow was perfect, and your imagery was fantastic.
    Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2008-12-01 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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