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    dots Submission Name: Winter Plague dots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsWinter Plague dots
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    The urge is back again….
    Haunting, calling my name
    I’m a puppet in the arms of fate

    Infecting my body,
    This liquid virus spreading through
    Filling in memories into the void of me

    And all I have left is to hide
    Fighting the impulses
    I, refusing to be frail

    The urge is back and
    Without the walls
    I love again…

    And it hurts
    And I cry
    Like a child cradled in
    The warmth of pain

    Without the walls
    I love…..

    I let others speak
    My hidden thoughts
    Promising myself that once
    And only once
    Here inside this womb
    I will allow myself to be weak

    Without the walls …

    But once that’s gone
    Love must leave along
    And I will dissect my soul
    Purging myself

    Once and only once
    When the urge decides to come

    I love…







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      hey lady,
    it was nice to see you writing again. I liked it but I was a bit confused in the poem even knowing a bit of the background history. I dont know andy I think that you should let things be as they are. Stop thinking so much. I read in your journal that you have lots of energy, that's good, use that your advantage and just stop making yourself unhappy. It's better to just enjoy what you have. The winter plague follows a happy spring. Where everything grows anew. The promising yourself to be weak spot really hit the spot, I always wonder what it would be like to really see you and not the mask that you are always wearing. You never let others in, this mask its all Ive known and Ive never tried to intrude inside your facade because if thats your wall, your protection then who am I to break it down. good poem andy but it would be sort of a challenge for you to write something happy, I dont know the mood in this poem felt somber to me and you even said that you would like to write something that wasnt like that. Maybe it would make you feel better to write something happy. it was a good poem though...bravo and welcome back
    | Posted on 2008-12-01 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]


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