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    dots Submission Name: Little Night Owldots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1526
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsLittle Night Owldots
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    Oh little owl of the night
    This ode is wrote for you
    I hope it finds you safe and well
    In everything you do
    Residing in your little nest
    As safe as safe can be
    Sheltered from the outside world
    And all its agony

    Oh little owl of the night
    With your hair of golden brown
    And eyes that sparkle endlessly
    Amidst your playful frown
    Watching as the world goes by
    Like an ever spinning wheel
    Will you ride the carousel
    And show just how you feel

    Oh little owl of the night
    You never seem to rest
    Morning, noon and evening time
    Pursuing every quest
    Thinking of your many plans
    And in your mind you search
    For answers that will move you on
    As you swing upon your perch

    Oh little owl of the night
    What pains your weary soul
    Do you yearn a love of yesterday
    That once made you so whole
    Do you carry him within your heart
    From this love will you be free
    Are you resigned to love this boy
    For all eternity

    Oh little owl of the night
    I wish you everything
    That you will find real happiness
    With the joy that it will bring
    So whenever you feel lonely
    Or whenever you feel blue
    Remember that your one true love
    Is still in love with you









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      This is very sweet Frank, I really enjoyed reading it. I found myself wondering if it was written by a father to a daughter ar from home. Perhaps she ran away from home to test her wings, or maybe is away at school. Or it could be for a past love too,---I guess that's why I like it som much,--because you don't tell all,--and the reader can fill in their own blanks.

    Your use of rhyme and repetition makes the poem flow along rhythmically and you keep the "little night owl" image fresh throughout with words like frown, perched, nest--

    Thanks for submitting

    Sally
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Delightful read! I think this "Little Owl" is not the feathered kind, but a "night owl" of the feminine person kind! Ah, but the poem is delightful, and fun to read. From the title, one expects a nature theme, and instead finds an energetic, caring, and delightful love poem!

    Excellent, as all of your work tends to be!!
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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