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    dots Submission Name: Snow angels and wicked thoughtsdots

    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSnow angels and wicked thoughtsdots

    Take hold,
    Guide me
    Sinister light.

    (She kneels praying to a hollow god)

    Wondering if sadness is all she is,
    Gripping the life out of faith;
    There is hope yet,
    For salvation.

    Wretched soul,
    Take an oath to never again

    (Snow angels and wicked thoughts)

    Nothing stands,
    The lights your own,
    The stage you set so nicely
    Captive, mesmerizing.

    (Bite me evil thoughts)

    A barren tree stands amidst
    An empty desolated,

    (One day you will believe)

    Her hero,
    The tree,
    And the barren street.

    (She knows she won’t survive)

    Naked Babe,
    Among the frozen earth,
    The howling wind,
    On a day like this.

    (Sky clad and hungry)

    She gives in,
    Her hero,
    The tree,
    And the barren streets
    Are left waiting.

    And under that frozen earth,
    There lies the naked babe
    Gripping the life out of faith.
    She finally believes...

    While her hollow god makes her sleep

    Alone …

    under a barren tree

    Submitted on 2008-12-01 21:34:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very beautiful and thought provoking with a strange religious twist interlaced through it that I found very interesting.. I also think this would make a very interesting monologue as well..
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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