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    dots Submission Name: where this stopsdots

    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 863
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       im so sick of these people who shit on everyone else just because they can. fuck em.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotswhere this stopsdots

    you stabbed my soul before i could scream and
    left your bloody fingerprints on
    all of the film in my memory.
    a locked room mystery with just one catch:
    you had the key.

    paint the pretty white roses red
    and adjust your crown of broken
    glass so that every body knows
    just who the winner is. deal out
    your diamonds as i swallow my
    shards of self respect. please,
    donít worry, just leave me
    bleeding here and go off to find
    another victim of your innocent
    fun and mind games. prey and
    pray alike because we all know
    who is going home tonight. my
    heartís expiration date has come
    at last, and i bleed, i bleed. itís
    seeping through my fingers but
    you can't see it because you were
    never there. you never cried until
    the blood ran down your face or
    swore at the clouds who couldn't
    save you or closed your eyes and
    listened to your heart beat and
    beat and wish that it would just stop.

    god at his typewriter.
    manically depressed,
    but a brilliant writer nonetheless.

    Submitted on 2008-12-02 01:53:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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