i don't think that i disliked it more than i liked it.
you spend a certain amount of time in this poem being a bit confused, but it gets to the point where the things you needed to know are the things that you do, if you follow, and so it's quite appealing really, because you colour the blanks in with a myriad of possibilities, and there are 1000 poems in that story.
i like it,
and might come back with suggestions, for right now though i'm really just seeing what clubs you have got in your golf bag.
this is a pitching wedge.
(a club ventured when there is the need for creativity in order to reach the green. and really, people ought to know stuff about golf)