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    dots Submission Name: never knew anythingdots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/257
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 83
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    dotsnever knew anythingdots
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    The scene played out like a movie
    words and objects
    thrown around without thought
    screams, no more laughter
    tears and angry pouts.
    The girl
    the one that gets called babygirl
    walked out without a thought
    threw her whole life away
    because she doesn't care anymore she says.
    Tries to make it on her own
    without help from mum
    only 16 but still she tries
    to just land on her butt.
    How foolish is this little girl
    trying to make it in the grownup world
    she should of stayed at home
    and stayed in school
    now she lives in raggy apartments
    sells her soul for food and profits
    to bad that she lost it all
    when she left
    to bad she thought she knew it all
    when she never knew anything.




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