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    Author: zepposzag
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 6/6/6
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 120
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 503



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    a gesture to the mortal who santize my plan who burn their thoughts with ifs and nots to fear this perfect man pieces of your miracles that glimmer in glimpses so viscious they dangle like your dreams and your wishes created to hold on your convictions and grief its a life then its so on after that its relief stranded my sinners i have sculpted a place to languish in envy and sit in disgrace forget all my wonders that i keep out of reach its a life and a contract with a death you cant breach




    Submitted on 2008-12-02 14:47:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this was pretty original, and your use of words imaginative.

    I feel it started off a little pretentious, but was pretty good from "pieces of your miracles..." onwards.

    I know this was a rant and that was why it was all mashed together, but I do feel this work would be better if it was written in lines.

    Also, sorry to sound pedantic, but surely you meant "sanitize" and "vicious".

    In conclusion I would say this was quite good.
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]



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