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    dots Submission Name: Apple Seeds and Lovedots
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    Author: silverdrika
    ASL Info:    22/F/Brasil
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 127/123/43
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1352
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I haven't written anything for centuries now... This actually just came across as I was trying to vent to be able to concentrate on work. I am feeling nonchalant, yet skeptic today. Hope this means I will start writing once again. I hope.


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    dotsApple Seeds and Lovedots
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    Life whistles serenely.
    What am I saying?
    Ive got an apple in my hand and a juicy chunk in my mouth.
    I wish I had an apple tree with apple seeds,
    And that apple seeds were a currency.

    What am I saying?

    My hand sweats when you hold it.
    I wish true love were buyable, unexpirable,
    The kind we can take for granted,
    And that apple seeds were a currency.

    Do you hear me laughing?

    I think I used to say the same.
    I wish our smiles cost a penny each,
    Youd die poor, Im sure,
    But if apple seeds were a currency,
    And true love were buyable, unexpirable,
    Id marry you for free.

    Do you get what this means?

    Hold my pinky for a while.
    I wish this rain could melt us like sugar,
    And that the Earth were diabetic,
    Youd be wrapped around my pinky as we sank,
    We would kill and die, penniless and poor,
    And true love would still not be buyable, unexpirable,
    And apple seeds whos to say?




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    ||| Comments |||
      This has a sweet simplicity that gathers force as it takes me on
    a rhyming ride. Who would figure? All the bean counters, of course,
    don't have a clue as to what riches really are.

    Anything could serve as currency, not to get technical, but how does one find love that has value, and how does one fathom the
    idea that when we kiss, the mother earth gets a sugar high?

    I love this and have to save it. Thanks for sharing!

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is the most creative poem I've seen so far!
    It's quirky and out of the box, and although many in this world strive for uniqueness, I think you have gotten that down.

    I'm adding this to my favorites.

    the word juicy threw me for a moment, but it fits in with the piece nevertheless.

    -CC
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 00:00:00 | by CourtneyLynne | [ Reply to This ]


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