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    dots Submission Name: Sacred Scardots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsSacred Scardots
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    Sacred Scar

    A rite of passage
    But a blade by any other name
    Sacred pit of skin
    Scarred split of flesh
    Red angers pain
    Is slow rivulet’s
    Runs its discourse of hurt
    Now from inside
    To external brought

    It nor I will forget
    The scar
    Indelible cut across years
    Of hereafter
    This rite of my tribal instinct
    A tattoo of my own description
    Distinct

    It not I will ever regret
    The connection drawn
    To the knife edge
    Of those who see
    This scar is me
    We are one
    In confessions torture
    Un-named

    Blood let the signature
    Of a frigid moment
    I felt instead its warm sting
    Of compassion
    My own self
    Crucifixion
    I drew to steel

    To vindicate
    To vacate void feeling
    I gave a name to the razor
    And broke the spell
    The dead and miss-incanted spell
    Of my pain







    Submitted on 2008-12-02 19:24:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This describes the scars very well. I recently relapsed into such behavior-and quit, again, for the second time in a month (this time for good). You describe the attraction, the Sirenic pull, to sharp objects extremely well. Nicely done.

    Saol fada chugat,

    Darkwings
    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks Haely... I'll be back another day to comment .... noit feeling so hot today...
    | Posted on 2008-12-07 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It was beautiful in its own. It really spoke to me. That's all I can say.

    Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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