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    Author: Sheakhan
    ASL Info:    25/M/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 175/197/89
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 951
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    Bytes: 490



    Description:
       Written from the prompt:
    "Describe Rain"


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    Raindrop tenacious,
    sudden, voracious,
    a taste of the earth is its drive.

    And upon abrupt reaching
    the earth that it's seeking,
    regret is the shining behind its dull eyes.

    Much is the fashion
    of those who choose passion
    and deep felt desire
    over logical thought.

    And pity the droplets
    that, plummeting down let
    their simple minds wandering
    decide they'd rather not.




    Submitted on 2008-12-03 03:06:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice.
    It's a nice little poem, And the rhythm goes so very well with the topic, giving off the illusion of raindrops.

    Good Job Keeg.
    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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