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Author: Sheakhan ASL Info:    25/M/Washington Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 175 /197 /89 Words: 64

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Raindrop tenacious, sudden, voracious, a taste of the earth is its drive. And upon abrupt reaching the earth that it's seeking, regret is the shining behind its dull eyes. Much is the fashion of those who choose passion and deep felt desire over logical thought. And pity the droplets that, plummeting down let their simple minds wandering decide they'd rather not.

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Nice. It's a nice little poem, And the rhythm goes so very well with the topic, giving off the illusion of raindrops. Good Job Keeg. ~Carrie

| Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

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