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Author: Sheakhan
ASL Info:    25/M/Washington
Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 175 /197 /89
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Written from the prompt:
"Describe Rain"


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Raindrop tenacious,
sudden, voracious,
a taste of the earth is its drive.

And upon abrupt reaching
the earth that it's seeking,
regret is the shining behind its dull eyes.

Much is the fashion
of those who choose passion
and deep felt desire
over logical thought.

And pity the droplets
that, plummeting down let
their simple minds wandering
decide they'd rather not.




Submitted on 2008-12-03 03:06:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice.
It's a nice little poem, And the rhythm goes so very well with the topic, giving off the illusion of raindrops.

Good Job Keeg.
~Carrie
| Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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