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    dots Submission Name: Rightfully Yoursdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 409
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I know this went from poem to rant to poem--I have to write to cope. End of story--some of my writings are private--I don't write for anyone else generally. This one isn't just for me, however. If you like this one, great, if not, oh well. Comment if you want. Not open to suggestions on this write. No changes. QED


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    dotsRightfully Yoursdots
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    I want to love you with all my heart
    But "I love you" must suffice
    You keep searching it for something
    It's not there anymore

    I broke your heart once before
    Don't want to make it twice
    But she still has what you want
    The pieces you're looking for

    I'd like nothing more than to have them back
    Because you deserve them more than her
    But they were mine to give and mine to lose
    How unfortunate you came so late

    I still feel her in the bottom when
    Occasionally my bottle will stir
    When warm it hurts, when cold I'm numb
    What a cruel twist, this fate

    And I don't LIKE to talk about it.
    It disturbs the bottle
    When you push and press
    I mean, I love you to death
    But I stock and I take and I store
    And I try to bury all this pain
    And my memories, every single one
    Is drawn to her, she was all I knew
    So I bury it beneath the rest

    I'll always love her, you signed up with that
    I forgive and accept things the way they are
    But when I stress it fills to the brim
    And then the pressure kicks in
    Foam bubbles over the cauldron in my heart
    The acid of problems spills over
    And yeah, I'm going to think about it
    I never have a choice

    Do you ever think of your past?
    She is my past, I have few memories prior
    And everything I can think of can remind me

    Colors, green orange blue yellow
    Movies songs lyrics the works
    Places people and let's not forget the dreams
    There are only two ways around I can see

    Numb my heart, can't just kill part
    Forget my past, who I am
    No

    But unless something changes dramatically
    I think I'm set where I am
    Try to understand I don't want to feel the way I do
    I'd like to feel more than love for you

    And so I stay and hope some day when I remember my past I'll see you instead
    So if you stay be patient with me, try not to let things get to you please
    I don't mean to show passion then cold
    And it's not always her, you know
    That's not even how it starts most of the time

    And I do love you
    I hope that's enough




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      I have read yours and think it quite nice. I do not mind the poem to rant to poem. I think that added a unique quality.

    The write Morsketch left for you I feel is perhaps the person you were writing about. For you are both of the same age and both from Tx. But, nevermind my mindless searching and conclussions. It does not matter.

    There was plenty of emotion in this piece. I feel you have had a lot in your life. Writing is a good way to help cope with stress, life, and love. I have used in often in my short life. I may only be 17, but I have felt the pain of depression and the loss of someone I loved. Writing helped me through.
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe Iíll leave
    To find what I deserve

    Iíve spent too long waiting
    To wait around for you

    Spelunking deep in the dark of that past
    That no, I try never to think of

    Haunted and hounded
    And lonely in pain

    When I look back all I see are gray tables
    All I hear are nonexistent hateful voices

    You wouldnít run from that too?
    So I run to you

    And ever so often you gaze into your past
    Telling me how cruel she was

    Trying to convince yourself
    That youíre better off without your first love

    I know you think she took
    The most important part of you

    And while I love you
    So deeply

    Sometimes I feel Iím pouring myself into a bottomless well

    And in the end it hurts waiting
    For the better part of you.
    | Posted on 2008-12-08 00:00:00 | by Morsketch | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece, I can feel the emotion in it, and I can tell that it was a good catharsis for you.

    Keep writing, our need for healing never ends. Catharsis opens the way to wholeness and wellness.
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]


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