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    dots Submission Name: Salvationdots
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    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1002
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 848



    Description:
       Life is good.


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    I have all these words brimming up to the surface. Flowing through my mind. Open and honest; disorienting. Cleansing and purifying all the pain I felt not so long ago. Life making sense. I live for him. I live for them. My son, my husband. My dreams realized everytime I see the love in their eyes. There's no effort anymore to making it work. The sky opened up, my angels fell like raindrops to soothe the heat. They fell in place without missing a pace. There was a time I feared the unknown above, no more darkness now I feel their love. Salvation from a desolate place. I've found myself a comfortable pace. In his arms, our son in mine, I never knew being a woman could be so divine.
    Passionate fights, warm embrace.
    A smile, a giggle, on his shining face. I'm a wife, I'm a mother with no eyes for any other.




    Submitted on 2008-12-04 17:36:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Definately thinking there, very nice, very nice. As well, it is very sweet! I really don't have anything to critique you with on this, it's just that great!
    | Posted on 2008-12-06 00:00:00 | by Plegias | [ Reply to This ]


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