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    dots Submission Name: Secret Gardendots

    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSecret Gardendots

    Green meadow of hope
    Flowers below in the breeze
    I watch the dance of fallen leaves
    Sunlight warming any touchable surface
    Caressing my bare skin with light
    Like a lover's embrace
    Raindrops kiss my face
    Nestling in the grass
    My secret garden
    My happy place
    The softness of the sky
    Nuzzling my every surface
    Easy and open
    Borrowed yet free
    This kind of love has no fee
    Every second more comfortable than the last
    Every breath coming more fast
    Every thought erasing the past
    I feel the heartbeat
    As I clench my whole world tighter
    Laughter escapes the throat near my head
    The dream is real
    I'm with him
    In our bed

    Submitted on 2008-12-04 17:40:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. I liked it alot.
    The imagery was great and I liked how the end was a twist to it. Great jog.
    Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-12-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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