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    dots Submission Name: Decoratingdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 480
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Decorating

    “But what is real? If you mean those impulses and signals sent by your senses and which are then interpreted by your brain. Then the real can be anything your mind desires.”
    Morphius. The Matrix.

    When a child opens its eyes
    Awareness blossoming
    New upon the day
    Does it then envision a clean blank page
    To be coloured
    To be decorated as it desires
    Should all those hues and images
    Then be given a name

    Yet

    What would be if the child could see
    Things that were not the same

    In each and every second
    These myriad patterns of light react
    To thoughts born from learning
    Labeled with a voice which says “this” is
    This
    And “that” is
    That

    Yet a blank page emerges
    Each and every single day
    But written and coloured by acceptance
    In the same new way
    But
    What if for a moment you dream
    And decorate your world differently

    What then would the eyes of the liberated see
    Would they see the world as is
    Or see repainted coherency
    Or would there be
    A moment of birth
    Where awareness sees through
    And beyond reality
    And sees with the eyes
    of a newly born child

    A daily place of spirit
    Life and light
    A spoken place
    Where all form
    Takes on the form
    Of the heavenly blank page
    Of light
    Where on is written
    All possibility
    And your mind
    Decorating the universe infinitely

    Or will mere whim transform
    To what it might
    The photons and the fabric of stars
    Could we then hold creations dust
    In our palms
    And with a breath of splendour
    Puff beauty into being

    Should thought
    Become a brush stroke then
    Would we sweep and stride
    With such a capable hand
    The essence of magnificence a new world
    To greet our waking eyes

    Or is this
    What we have come to see
    The ballet of light as it settles within us daily
    Some other wonder
    Some other hand which says
    See what I have wrought for you
    From the physical tongues of eternity

    But I know you
    People of Earth
    And I know the multitude of your dreams
    And how
    Given the power of your imaginings
    You could decorate so diversely
    All these things
    Which seem now so
    Ordinary

    Is it but a moment
    A second of perception
    Or a reaction
    Predetermined by acceptances indoctrination

    What where those things
    We began to see
    When as a new born child
    Our eyes first

    Opened






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      Thanks Alex... back another time to reply in more detail
    | Posted on 2008-12-07 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there, I thought this was good, original.

    My only real criticisms would be, I thought "people of earth" sounded a bit naff and I also think it would be better without the Matrix quote. Other than that, I liked it. Nice one!
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]


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