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    dots Submission Name: peacedots

    Author: unclerob
    ASL Info:    33/m/kc ks
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 17/16/8
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    i grew up w/ pieces
    of other peoples pieces of wholes
    i tried to make a whole myself
    but tha pieces rarely fit, so
    i started takin tha pieces
    before they were released
    not happy findin pieces
    whole piece people
    didnt want no mo(re)
    but w/ no peace
    in my piece of the third rock
    it got a little rocky
    and i started droppin pieces
    that i copped
    but the pieces that i still got
    brought me no closer to whole
    what it did was bring a bid
    and i had to do a piece in tha hole
    alone in my skin
    tha stone and tha cold
    slowly wore a hole in my soul
    i was asked
    if i got out would i be good?
    i replied i dont know.
    u might have to ask tha piece
    that i left on flo(or)
    some time later
    i was walked to tha do(or)
    w/ tha same old clothes
    and a small piece of dough.
    only thing i really knew was
    what was new was now old
    and i ain't givin a fuck about
    other peoples pieces no mo(re)
    i figure im a make a piece for myself
    quick or slow
    stand like a man
    and turn MY piece to a whole

    Submitted on 2008-12-04 22:57:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can dig it. Good play on piece and peace. I like the idea of piece people and whole piece people. This is one strong piece (pardon). You've got it going.
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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