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    dots Submission Name: godots
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    Author: stormybluerose
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 31/37/23
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsgodots
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    you left this pain with me
    so many years ago
    i didn't think
    i'd ever see
    you again
    but then a
    whole year of pain
    Later
    you called me and asked
    what you doing?
    I just hung up on you
    because of the pain you left in me
    you leave a message
    that says to meet you at
    our old hang out
    in the woods
    near the lake where we had our first kiss
    I didn't think i'd go
    but i ended up there
    you were later, as always
    never on time
    i waited a while
    eventually
    i gave up and just when i was about to go
    you came
    i asked you why you left so long ago
    and you didn't know
    yout hought it was because
    you needed to think
    I don't think so
    I think you
    were being stupid
    you didn't have a clue
    you never will
    Just Go




    Submitted on 2008-12-05 01:33:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm I can see this from your perspective and from my experience they never stayed long. Just long enough to leave when they knew it'd hurt again. Keep your heart for someone who won't leave for selfish reasons. I don't have much of critique cuz I'm just not used to your writing style but I enjoy your poems
    | Posted on 2008-12-13 00:00:00 | by all2rest | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I guess I relate more to the other person. I have had to do alot of thinking lately, but I don't have a clue what to think. I hurt my love without thinking, and I was stupid. They obviously wish to be with you, but its up to you and your heart. Mine made a mistake and kept me.
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by jasonsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]


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