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I will be you apprentice if you will be mine and together we will learn each other’s secret ways. The tilt of your head, or the tilt of your smile: these, I will study. Because I am an unpeeler of things and you fascinate me. Because I am the one with the house full of tangerine skins I am the one who peels a potato just to see the tender whiteness of the inside, even after all those buried weeks. You are the Mona Lisa—no, you are the canvas when all that paint is peeled away you are what Leonardo first saw the blank cloth that beat with a secret heart that had a hundred dreams hiding inside of it. Some days I want to wrap you up in all the important clothes—the gray coat, the red scarf, the green shirt (with the hot cocoa stain. I made it for you, remember) and then slowly peel off each layer one by one. The unpeeling is a joy within itself. Some days I want to play pick-up sticks with the Coliseum, or your soul— the Roman pillars of your heart. I want to drag away every Doric column until what’s left stands on it own. Some days I want to peel away the blueness of the sky expose it for the carpet that it is the seams and nails our hopes are hung on. Maybe it would be beautiful. Maybe it would be poetry. |
wow, it is amazing. I do think that you could add a bit more about the person your talking about, and by that i mean to add what they think in another poem or something. but the first paragraph is m personal favorite. I will be you apprentice if you will be mine and together we will learn each other’s secret ways. It's just gorgeous. *Rory* | Posted on 2008-12-08 00:00:00 | by wizardmaster | [ Reply to This ] | Wow this was amazing, I loved it. No honestly it is perfect. I love how you treat her the person with such care and beauty. Like you want to see what's really there because it intrigues you and because you already know it's going to be beautiful. | I love how there is that delicacy there with the structure and the examples. It is just a beautiful write all together, that person is lucky to have you. One typo in the beginning when it says you and means your but otherwise it is flawless. thank you for writing this piece :) ~flora | Posted on 2008-12-07 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ] | |