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    dots Submission Name: Insidedots
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    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 79/97/96
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    4.6667
    Bytes: 836



    Description:
       WoW, I sound really depressed!


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    dotsInsidedots
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    Ashes to ashes
    Dust to dust
    It's pitiful that I love you so much

    I never knew you
    Never saw
    The person you were
    Never at all

    Wishing, waiting, watching,wanting
    Everything I can
    Because I'm all alone now
    Without a friend to stand

    One, two, three, four
    Five, six, seven, eight
    The years I spent hating you
    A raw cold icy fire
    Which could never warm

    The problem
    You
    My desire

    One, two, three
    Four?
    The years I spent denying
    That you would leave me here
    Slowly, slowly dieing

    One, two
    There is no 3
    Because Im already dead
    So go on in and play

    Since to you its only a game




    Submitted on 2008-12-07 00:07:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The beginning was pretty good. The way you did the number thing was pretty clever. I understood where it came from, but it threw the piece off a little. Maybe its just me.

    | Posted on 2008-12-08 00:00:00 | by AdrienneCale | [ Reply to This ]


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