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    dots Submission Name: Leaving Londondots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLeaving Londondots

    Leaving London

    A thousand flickered lights
    Beat out neon
    Fantasies animation
    Jerks its pseudo motion
    Feet by fifty foot tall
    On the south river board walk

    Juke box gangsters one-armed bandit
    Hang street corners
    From the eyes red light
    By cliché shop windows
    Of a thousand past and spent Christmas glazed nights

    Fishnet nylons legs
    Twist on black stiletto
    And stab their vended sex
    Peep show neon by night
    Beckons to the slow glue of gutters
    And last years rain paint
    Still shines on Eros
    Street mirrors of a thousand flashing lights

    Colour thrown to concrete
    Looses its ghost
    Down darkling alley recesses
    Hide the gaunt faces
    Of old guitar heroes
    Unshaven lips stuck
    To the bottles neck
    Glints and stagger drunkenness

    Flash blue corkscrews banshee wail
    Through the avenue
    As shoes shuffle around the spilt blood pool
    Swells hot to cold in crimson
    Breathing its last
    For the sake of the 50.00
    Now trembling hands
    Had stashed in a pocket

    A line of tambourine orange
    Dances a sect jitterbug
    Tapping bashing chanting
    Out their impartial message
    Ha-re Krishna Ha-re Krishna
    Krishna Krishna Ha-re Ha-re

    Shoulders back in the city
    Eye to eye dares to look at me
    Chill grip warns every stranger
    To walk sidelong by
    The night is rushing its spent conclusion
    Cold wet kerbstone
    Trips an indifference to warm held hands

    I hate this place

    Pavement meals and chewing on plastic
    London’s dead walls
    Of stinking underground passage and traffic

    I think
    For me to leave
    Go visit the trees
    Return to the heart
    I left in the country

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