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    dots Submission Name: Angel of Mercydots

    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Nothing personal, just sort of came to me. Strange how when you aren't feeling anything particular at all is when words creep up on you and take hold. I'm thinking maybe it has something to do with the book I'm reading, but who could be sure.

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    dotsAngel of Mercydots

    Angel of mercy
    Find my broken wings
    Angel of mercy
    Heal all things

    Spiralling downward
    Beyond control
    Trapped in fates tight clench
    The closeness of Hell's acidic stench

    Angel of mercy
    Hold me tight
    Angel of mercy
    I fear the night

    Looking above
    And so below
    Gaurdian angel
    Forgetting to show

    She's gone now
    Brittle and broken
    Porcelin shattered
    Heart never to be awoken
    Endless slumber befalls

    Angel of mercy
    Break down the bearing walls
    Angel of mercy
    She can't see

    Heaven's gates
    Sealed so tight
    Hell's endless glow
    Lost in the night
    Something she shouldn't know

    Angel of mercy
    How could it be?
    Angel of mercy
    Is that lost girl me?

    Submitted on 2008-12-08 02:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello, thanks so much for the comment. I have altered the title. Yup I agree with Haely, this poem does flow very well it also has that hint of desperateness felt when searching for a certain respite........
    | Posted on 2009-01-11 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed well, the rhyme was consistant (in the parts where rhyme was placed), and the imagery was very good. I've often written poems that had nothing to do with my life. Just inpspired by something I was doing. Usually better than the poems that I write for me.
    Anyway I'm rambling... This was a great poem. I loved.
    Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-12-08 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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