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    dots Submission Name: An Introverts Extroversiondots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       just felt like writing


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    dotsAn Introverts Extroversiondots
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    Peering through both windows
    with disdain of mortal thoughts
    What swells of worth can conjur up
    inside this room of wrought?

    I've built it all from inward out with no secure design
    Blueprints spawned from this one thought;
    to avoid all sense of crime.
    With winged prayers and heartfelt laughs
    my base becomes my prime


    But the walls were raised around me
    in those instances of lies.
    I draped the open windows
    with curtains made by twine
    twilled from deceit and false hopefulness
    they filter love divine



    I've built this place from inside out
    to make my name be known.
    the world would see what I have seen
    through the windows of my home.

    The plans have changed, more walls have raised,
    more rooms to store the truth.
    Packed away in closet space
    where moths turn them to food.

    Amidst these walls I work away,
    constructing from night to day,
    believing one day the work and fray
    will be revealed in bold display.




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      I love this, it's so cleverly written. I really like the 2nd and 3rd sections with 5 lines, I rarely see that in poetry and it stood out. The rhyme scheme was great. What I gather from this is that you're building all these walls up, secluding your self in great detail...but it's that very design that wants recognition. The title is very fitting, in that case. Nice job :)
    | Posted on 2012-02-16 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]


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