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    dots Submission Name: Baby Girldots
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    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 842
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    Bytes: 382



    Description:
       I wrote this for my niece whose baby was born with heart defect.


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    dotsBaby Girldots
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    A quick flash of light
    streaking through the sky,
    though brief,
    her beauty could not be dimmed.
    Enhanced by a moment,
    too swift to mark:
    but mark, she did.

    Touching hearts and filling lives,
    one moment here
    cherished in the our sight
    the next;
    resting near
    the heart of God.




    Submitted on 2008-12-08 16:53:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is lovely, and so tender and touching. I think God will hold a special place for this precious little girl!

    I was born with a congenital heart defect (and a serious one), which remained undiagnosed until I had serious heart failure in my late 50's!
    | Posted on 2008-12-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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