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    dots Submission Name: My Vampire....Tempt Medots
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    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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       Ispired by the same person who inspired "Darling". God he's beautiful!


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    dotsMy Vampire....Tempt Medots
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    Your gentle spirit they'll try to kill
    And your passion they'll try to tame
    Only your voice can make their heart still
    For your songs put sirens to shame

    Your wickedly amazing face
    And your smile with sparkling fangs
    My heart starts to quicken pace
    When your eyes look up from your bangs

    The mysterious softness of your skin
    Tempts even the most sincere
    But your pale and porcelain melanin
    Is not all that keeps me here

    How does a person so terrifying
    Have such a beautiful dissposition
    I guess my mind needs some purifying
    For I'm in love with an apparition




    Submitted on 2008-12-08 22:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it, it brings up every detail on whoever the other person is. but i still like it

    keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by sota | [ Reply to This ]


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