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    dots Submission Name: Final Standdots
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    Author: Doublefeather
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    Words: 191
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       This poem is not about me, it is about my beliefs and is about my Lord Jesus Christ, and how He can save the people from their sins.


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    dotsFinal Standdots
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    I do not boast,
    So it is known from coast to coast,
    That I am the last stand,
    The final defense for man,
    Without me man will fall,
    Without me the world will lose it all,
    All hope,
    So the world hangs by a thin rope,
    Yet, they foolishly chop at it,
    Hoping, praying to see it fall into a bottomless pit,
    Never to return,
    I hold the rope and they want to be free from my rules,
    I call them sons and daughters, yet they believe I call them tools,
    So by their actions they will doom themselves,
    Though not all will on purpose, but they will send themselves to Hell,
    So if I gave them peace and life,
    They chose war and strife,
    So if they want to die,
    And they will not hear my cry,
    Then I will let surrender them to sin,
    And if and when,
    They finally cry unto me in real repentance,
    I will lift them up carry them in my arms shoulder and save them,
    From sin can I save every man,
    If he will seek the salvation of his final stand.





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      I'm always kind of wary around poems like this. I mean, really, what is your definition of coming to God? of "real repentance"? Serious question. I am a Christian and pray often. I go to church sometimes. I love God and anyone who thinks that's stupid, have a nice life. Yet I believe in ghosts, I see some truth in some Wiccan and Hindu and Jewish teachings, and I believe hell is reserved for unrepentant mass murderers/rapists, et cetera, and heaven is open to all no matter what creed as long as you lived an OK life. And agian, anyone who thinks that is stupid, best of luck to you. Anyway, this was... Thought-invoking... By the way, spellcheck would be a god idea (just a friendly tip). The errors were slightly distracting.

    Best of health to you,
    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Jessa, I wouldn't consider this "forcing religion down your throat" It's taged as religious and you chose to read it..funny how people can write all sorts of stuff on here from Lesbian to hindu..but someone mentions God...:)
    Great Write Double Feather.
    The last line is my favorite " If he will seek the salvaion of his final stand."
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      Not really into people speaking for God. How do you know I'm going to hell? Did he really tell you that? Or did you read it in a book? You know that book also states that if you lay down with an ox, you are to be put to death. Great fiction and plenty of drama.
    Did you ever play whisper down the alley...there's a good example for you.

    Don't mean to be mean but I'm getting tired of religion being forced down my throat, whatever happened to free will?
    | Posted on 2008-12-09 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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